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Prosebusting: creating the shortest distance between a concept and its readers.

Here are some real examples before — and after — they crossed our desks.

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Prosebusted
In the context of a climate of serious financial restraint within the federal government, there are now strong imperatives to manage resources with improved efficiency thereby reducing the longer term costs to the government’s administration.
(35 words)
The federal government, facing severe financial restraint, must cut costs and manage more efficiently.
(14 words)

Since the plan reflects the department’s developing vision of the future, it will be amended annually to incorporate those changes in the vision which occur as it matures.
(28 words)
The plan will be reviewed every year and changed as needed.
(11 words)

We have agreed to concur on the recommendations for the two staffing processes.
(13 words)
We accept the recommended candidates.
(5 words)

This document is the overarching and enabling pivot that plows the field and accelerates the implementation of all major activities in an attempt to realize the Office’s Vision. (28 words) (meaningless tripe that we pulverized out of existence: 0 words)

Last updated 1 March 2006

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